2011年6月英语四级作文真题:网上购物

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My views on Online Shopping With the development of society,people are more and more wealth.Now,it is a very fashion that shopping is not in the mall.Online shopping is very popular. Every coin has its two sides.On the one hand,shopping online has many advantages.The most important one is that it is more convenient than in the shopping mall.Shopping online is very cheap.On the other hand,it also exits some bad problems.Some shopper may cheat us,and we may buy some things we don't want to buy.It is very bad. As far as I am concerned,if we buy things online,we must be very careful.We may well buy some important and expensive things in the shopping mall.