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I have a good friend, her name is Cao Xianhong, she is a pretty girl and she has big eyes.She loves smiling all the time ,so everyone likse to play with her, because she can bring hanppiness to others. what is more,she is willing to help anyone facing difficulties no matter how busy she is. This is friend, she is really very helpful,I love her very much!