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I think I’m pretty healthy.I exercise every day.A lot of my classmates like to eat junk food,but I never eat it.I think it’s bad for our health.I like to eat apples a lot because I think that one apple a day keeps the doctors away.Every day I like to drink a lot of water because water can develop the blood cycling.Vegetables are my favorite.too.I think we can get a lot of vitamins from them.My classmates think I am a vegetarianism.But I think that I also take enough meat,eggs and many other stuff.And I think that I am really healthy.
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