作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;作者能较灵活准确地使用词汇表达,更能较熟练地使用一定的学术词汇;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。
I support that we should own a healthy habits in our life.In this way,we can prolong our life and live fortunately. From my point of view,I think people should adopt conductive suggestions.First,we should get a healthy eating habits if we want to owe a healthy body.Second,sleep is so crucial for our body that we should go to bad early and get up early.Third,it is necessory for us to choose jogging,playing basketball,swimming,skating,climbing or riding as our regular exercises. It's hard to escape the conclusion that healthy habit is necessory for our life.Hence,since a balanced diet and sufficient sleep are both indispensable to physical fitness.we should put great emphasis on good habits.