拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;文中应增加一些长难句的使用,会为文章添彩;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Money attitudes Aristotle said:Money is not everything, but without money, everything is nothing. What attitude should we take to money?And our group do a survey on the attitudes and money list.If you have five million, what would you do?Fifty percent of the people chose the A. A is Of course, buying luxury cars and house.It is proved the view about Aristotle.A few people choose to donate money to charity.The number of around ten percent On the other hand,As a student ,our money comes from where?Parents, relatives, or your own?I hope that we can rely on their own hands to earn money to support themselves, do not ask their parents for money The third question is do you consider yourself what is the relationship with money?A. I am the master of money B. I am a slave to money In 20 individuals in 13 people choose to a other people choose B.The survey showed that people don't want to be around money In a word, in my opinion, money is not the key, the key is happy.The rich have money days, no money to live a poor life, but also to be happy.Well goes the saying, A contented mind is a perpetual feast.This is my life purpose.