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Welcome to our club There are many activities in our club.Our club is about sports.It hold on the basketball,football,baseball game and so on.If you join us.We will schedule time to go on sports.If you do everything,you will get a healthy body.You will be strong.If you build up everyday,you never go to the hospital. Fellow studen that meet the requirements and want to join in the sports club.Please call us at 6543210 or sent an email to sports@163.com.