高一英语作文模拟题:我的家乡

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My hometown was once a beautiful place which surrounded by many trees, and fishes were swimming freely in the lucid river. There dont' have high building and broad streets crude, but people are happy to live there even if the life is hard. As time goes by, there're more and more high buildings and all kinds of vehicles, but the environments is getting worse and worse than before due to the development of industry, Trees and fishes are disappeared gradually, and the goverment should pay more attention to fight with the pollution.