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Art is always the specific part of the nature.Nowadays,many people argue that it shouldn't under the support of the government. It cannot be denied that art can affect people's motion and temperament.Leaded by art,we start to watching the surroundings in a different aspect, trying to employ the new fields and finally enjoying the fantastic feelings.From this point,art is inevitably not divided into the useless subjects with its contribution to the improvement of human's lifestyle. However,I approve the opinion which I mentioned above.In today's society,hierarchy still exists.Upper class devote themselves to pursuing the beauty of art while lower class worries about the insufficient food.Money should be spent on the splade.So,government should pay more attention to the poor.From another perspective,the development of science needs financial support.And that is the fundamental of our real world contract to the wispy art.If art occupies too much time and energy of us,technology will not step forward.It is terrified to thinking of the image that thousands and thousands of people gather to talk about art with crops rot in the fields. In a consequence,art can be everyone's interest and hobby as well as someone' full-time job who has that talent instead of everyone's wholly life.Therefore,I suppose government transforms the money for art to science's evolution and take more actions to increase the quality of life。
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