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As far as I see, In oder to help the children to be independent, we shouldn't do too mach for them. And I'm making out three points for advice.Firstly ,the parent should set a good example at the things in life. Scendly, the children should be permit to having their own space to do what they thing they want to do. Thirdly, the parent should let them go to school by themselves rather than send them to school. All in all, the lovely child is the flowers,we must care about them to glow healthily.Besides, we must keep a balance between caring and independent.