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On Excessive Packaging In our life,we often notice many Excessive Packaging,which can make us fell uncomfortable. What does cause this phenomenonce?To myself,it's bisinesess that want to improve profit so that they can earn more money than ever before.In other words,some customers like to buy goods that were dressed by a lot of wonderful parttens. So,i must provide some views and advices as a consumer.First,any businesses should think about customer's fellings when buying.Then ,we all know Excessive Packaging is wasting resources,which only cuase peple debeat it.Finally,government should forbid them instead of encouraging them to do anything they want .