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My hometown used to be a peaceful little village with trees surounded, where fishes can be seen swimming in the clean water, where rough houses located beside the long and thin streets, where people worked for a simple life. Though it wasn't bustling, but i love it. As the time flying, a decade past by. The development of industry makes it a little city, filled of modern buildings and shops, crowded with cars and people. As a result of industry development, green trees and clean water are replaced by noise mechaines and dirty rubbishs. I miss the old days, but if we keep polluting the envieroment, we can only get back to the old days in our dreams. To save our hometown, it's important and urgent to control the pollution.