题目:On maintaining trust 保持信任
字数:150满分:100分
语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;有效地采用了一些简单的从句为文章增色;文中能较好的使用一些学术词汇,不过拼写错误比较多;请注意分段。
Nowadays , with the developing of economics , we trade and cordinate with each other far more flunently. But a part of people cheat in this processes , for instance , a company sells fake products to you , cordinaters betray commitments , you say you will come soon but you donot ,etc. As we all know, it is incorrect that we cheat each other . if we treat frends with this attitude , we must lose their trust and frendship evently,helping with each other will not be happened again , which is sad to you .