题目:Computer and Man人与电脑
字数:150满分:100分
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With the development of the technology,more and more people like to use computers.Computer has more benefits.For example,people can chat with their friends who don't live the same place by computer.Sometimes,people can go shopping and study by computer,this are very convenient for man.But,all things both have two apartments,computer will make people are addicted to computer games,the best important is that it is bad for health. In my opinion,as long as people can rational use of computer,I believe that computer can bring more benefits for people.