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Lan is my best friend,beause she is so realize me.whatever i thought she always understand And she is a kind girl.many classmates are like her.she with a heavy body ,but is so cute and took me a number of funny. She is rather young than me ,but she always look after me,when i meet trouble,she will support me at once.