拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用;请注意分段。
As the world has become more and more open,improving our manners behavior is necessary. Is very important to have a polite behavior for international communication. Also,improving our behavior is helpful to achieve the modern dream of our country. But in modern society,many people behave im bad manners. For examplE,many people are used to cross the stress when the traffic light still in red. As they ignore the traffic rules,they put their life in a danger situation. Aiso,we can always see the picture that people are trying jumping the queue in wherever that need to form a line.What's more, people spit in public place which is insanitation. In my opinion, improving national quality is a very heavy responsibilities,but the road is still long.We should try our best to do it.