拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用。
When I was young as a pupil in sixth grade in my primary school, I could run only a circle at a time for 400 meters. Nevertheless my PE teacher told me that I could do it better for 800 meters after training properly. It seemed not possible. My body was too weak , owing to lack of exercise. On a chilling day I started running on an early morning. Afterwards, I could run two circles more at a time already. This thing taught me that if I never began to solve the problem it would be always a problem. Do it properly and put more effort into it, after that it will be no difficulty in any circumstance.