2012年12月英语六级作文真题(II):人与电脑

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Nowadays,the computer is popular for teenager and children.When we do not use the computer any longer that may be we have a boring life.We used to put the computer as a good root and now is a widely common in our life.Without a computer we can't do any thing.The computer is our human's achievement.What do you think of the computer and human.