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新东方托福高分作文:我居住的城市的优缺点

发布时间:2013-07-23 16:11浏览次数:6147
要求:

【题目要求】

A person you know is planning to move to your town or city. What do you think this person would like and dislike about living in your town or city? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

【题目分析】

这是一个讨论假设问题的题目。尽量展开想象。注意:不要只说my city,要指出你所在城市的名字, 比如:Beijing, Shanghai等等。人们会喜欢的有:女人喜欢商场;男人可能喜欢书店;大的公园、动物园;名胜古迹;文化氛围;人们会讨厌的有:交通堵塞;空气不新鲜;大城市的排外主义(exclusivism)、不友善(unfriendly);
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文章学术词汇表达比较恰当,请注意检查单词拼写;若增加一些从句的使用,文章会取得更好的成绩;上下文衔接稍显不流畅。

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The reading passage explores the issue of employees want to work a four-day week .According to the reading ,working a four-day workweek for 80 percent o their normal pay would good for economy and the emplyees .The professor's lecture deals with the same issue.However the lecture apparently disproves what is argued in the reading material .And in the lecture ,he usea three specific points to support his idea. To start with ,the reading passage suggests that the shortened workweek would improve company benefits becaues the company could get more profits and hire more stuff with the same costs.Yet the professor claim that the company would spand more money .Because,hire more emplyees means more spend at work training and medial.Also ,they need more office space and computers .On account of above mentions ,the author's assertion turned out to be a preposterous idea. Furthemore ,contrary to the statement in the reading that four-day workweek would rsduce unemployment rates ,the professor contends that companies have other better choices,they expect their stuff work overtime or hire emplyees who is willing to work at friday .on the basis of this point the lecture eplicity refutes the reading. Finally ,the reading passage may be right about employees get more extra time for their own life but the author ignore the facts that the stuff lose more chances to advance career.

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