高一英语作文模拟题:我的家乡

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My hometown was a beautiful place. It was surrounded by many trees, fish was free swim in clear river, the houses were crude and streets were narrow, people were work hard and life was poor. Now, there are many tall buildings, fatories and stores, you can see many kinds of cars and vehicles in the streets. with industry developing the environment goes worst. trees are reduced and fish is disappear. pollution treatment is a urgent case now. we wish it come back.