希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是学术词汇的积累;语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;有效的运用了一些复杂句;请注意分段;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开。
I think that the failure is the mother of success,because only get failure,we can realize where we are wrong and from which we can improve ourselves step by step.Let's look some triumphant people they also have got failure many times.So don't be sorrowful when you are in failure but go on with faith.