语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;能够很好的使用长难句且句法很棒;文章词汇表达比较灵活,学术词汇的使用要继续加强;请注意分段。
As a saying goes "the failure is the mother of success",I agree that because only come across failure,we can realize where we are wrong and from which we can improve ourselves step by step.Let's look those who are success,they also have got failure many times.So don't be sorrowful when you are in failure but go on with a faith.