Source: Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.
丰富从句的使用,文章会更出色;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用;请作者加强词汇表达的灵活性,但文中有较多拼写错误。
As about the picture,is vividly reveals a phonomen is with the higher graduate diploma the less the unemployment. About this questioon,different people have different opinions,some people believe that If you have a process a haigher diploma.You will have a great job and a comfortable life in the future.however,The other person believed that it is not business that if you had a good job in the future about higher,they thought ability is more importer than diploma. In my prespect,as it picture disputed,the diploma more important in the society nowdays,it not be let us more work hard in our study but also let our learn more knowleadge,could be improve ourseleves and open our horizens.so,i could not more agree that haigher diploma is important,we must be study hard