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In the past,my country is very beautiful,there are many trees with many green leaves. The air is fresh and the water is clean,we can see that there are many fish playing in the river.But the builings is very poor.And now ,there are many tall buildings in the street,and there also largh and small cars running in the street.The environment is getting worse and worse,and the trees and fish is disappearing.So I think the most important work of our government is to deal with the environmental problems. .