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my views on online shopping It's a convient society . whatever you want to do ,always have a wouderful way to reach . It's same as shopping . As result of society emploment ,online shopping is becoming a popular lifestyle . Online shopping owns lots of advantages. It's helpful for someone that no time to go shopping.Online shopping can save time to do other things and can be better to relax oneself . And then online shopping maybe cheaper than shopping at shops.It really save money .But have a word says "every coins have two saids“， so do online shopping .Online shopping reduce the times of go out for some people and lead to health problems .What else , online shopping can't kown thing's quality ，and you may regret to buy it . In my view, online shopping is really a good way to buy something .But when you buy some expensive thing ,you have better to think seriously about where you buy .And shopping with your lover when a full of sunshine day is a perfect .don't you think ?
