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my views on online shopping It's a convenient society.Whatever you want to do,always have a wonderful way to reach.It's same as shopping . As a result of society emploment ,online shopping is becoming a popular lifestyle . Online shopping owns lots of advantages.It's helpful for someone that no time to go shopping.Online shopping can save time to do other things and can be better to relax oneself . And then online shopping maybe cheaper than shopping at shops.It really save money .But have a word says "every coins have two saids“,so do online shopping.Online shopping reduces the times of go out for some persons and leads to health problems .What else , online shopping can't kown thing's quality,and you may regret to buy it . In my view,online shopping is really a good way to buy something .But when you buy some expensive thing ,you have better to think seriously about where you buy.And shopping with your lover when a full of sunshine day is a perfect .don't you think ?
