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文中词汇表达较丰富恰当，学术词汇使用稍显不足；简单句比重稍微偏高，注意个别句子错误；过渡词和衔接词使用不恰当，缺少组织，可适当增加连接词的使用。
It's a convenient society.Whatever you want to do,always have a wonderful way to reach.It's same as shopping . As a result of society emploment ,online shopping is becoming a popular lifestyle . Online shopping owns lots of advantages.It's helpful for someone that no time to go shopping.Online shopping can save time to do other things and can be better to relax oneself.And then online shopping maybe cheaper than shopping at shops.It really saves money .But have a word says "every coins have two sides“,so do online shopping.Online shopping reduces the times of go out for some persons and leads to health problems.What else,online shopping can't kown thing's quality,and you may regret to buy it . In my view,online shopping is really a good way to buy something.But when you buy some expensive things,you have better to think seriously about where you buy.And shopping with your lover when a full of sunshine day is a perfect.don't you think ?
