高一英语作文模拟题:我的家乡

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Hometown，a place pulling me around, has changed greatly over these years. In the past, my hometown was surrounded by green trees with fishes chasing one another in groups in clear river. houses were simple and crude. People led a simple but happy life. But now, tall buildings stand everywhere. various of cars run in the street. Industial development leads to the environment deterioration. There are less and less woods, and we can hardly see any fish in the river. Thereofore, we shoud immediately treat pollution, protect our evionment.