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Should College Student Hire Cleaners? Recently, It is said reported that six students hired a cleaner to tidy their dorm which set off argument in society. Seldom did people agree with the behaviour . As far as i am concerned, i am also against what they did . Firstly,according to the news we can know that these children may be brought up by their parents previously. What they did in the dorm not only aggravated their bad habits but also