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firstly,we had a visit to chaohu lake,it gave deep imperssion to me.i want to use endless to describe the lake at first glance.you can find that the sky was connected with the lake visually.the spray flapped the shore ,the wave rolled with slap.the distant mountain partly hidden and partly visible when i have an overlook.
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