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The Social Networks Defferent people have different ideas about using of social networks. Some people believe that these social networks bring benefies to the young students. Others regard it. If I am to have a choice, I will not hesitate to choose the former. The social networks benefits us in many ways. First of all, we can benefit from marking friends online by Qzones, weibo and webchats. So we can communicate with friends and share our interesting life. Secondly, the social networks can be a immence information channels that people can learn about all the news from the world instantly. So we just use our smart phone or computer, all news will swarm into our minds. What is more, the social networks is a perfect place for us to share our mood and extending indviduality. Because I guess people will be a ture self on Internet. That is no doubt that some people could find the special themself and be indulged in it. So, the social networks as a virtual space can reduce our pressure from true life. In a word, the use of social networks change our life and we can benefit from it.
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