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Playing football is my favorite spot.I like playing football is the cause of I picked up On the way home by chance. because I interesting in football,I try to play football with friends. unbelievable,It was not one day before enjoy the football. I frequent train and join lot of matches.I try and win all the football game. My favorite football star is an English person who Bei Ke Hang Mu,my the biggest wish is famous of a professional football player.