2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

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In the moder sociey,more and more excessive packings are apeaer in severl seles.As well as we known,everyone want to have a good packing to behavior their rich or ceremory level. As far as I'm concerned,this condition is bad for our country.this is a totally excessive.I think we must to reduce this behavir.