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The Gragon Boat Festival is one of the important festival in china,the same as the Spring Festival,Mid-Autumn Festival and Tomb-sweeping Day. There are some traditions about it and we have celebrated it for thousands of years. When I was young,I know that the Gragon Boat Festival is to memory QuYuan who jumped into the river because he wanted to oppose to those villains.Another tradition is that People usually get together to eat Zongzi and watch movies at night.In fact,the most popular activity is that people will hold a dragon-boat racing or some games which played in water,And the winner will get a lot of gifts,such as foods or little things so it is really fun! While for most of the students,the other fun is that we will be off class for nearly two days and we can enjoy the warm day with our best friends. From what I said,we can easily draw a conclusion that the Gragon Boat Festival is popular to Chinese people for a long time,and we enjoy a lot from it so it is absolutely a festival belongs to china that nobody could deny that.