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Recently our class had a discussion about what they would do in the coming summer vacation. Here is the result. My friend Tina told me that she was going to see the Great Wall and other beautiful sight sin in Beijing to have fun with her family, I think she'll enjoy herself. But Jim said that he would stay at home instead go shopping. Because he is too tired and wants to have a good rest, he will stay at home and do sports every day. Hmm...How about me? Well, in fact, I can't make up my mind. My mother wants to go abroad and I want, too. But she also have too much worries like who's going to look after room and dog. So in the end we stay at home and look after everything.
