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to: c.c : subject:Liming Li Ming I'm super proud of, what plans for this weekend? I plan to go to Gulangyu Islet to play, but a person to go a bit boring, we go to the how, if go, that we in this week's Sunday eight am in the ferry that concentrated, looking forward to your reply