作者能较熟练、灵活地使用词汇,建议要多使用学术词汇;从句使用量稍显不足;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
The society and economic of China have witnessed great development in nowadays.At the same time,tourism is increasingly booming in China.It is acknowledged that tourism bring harm to the environment while the rest don't think so.As is seen to me,with the popularity of tourism,it is no doubt that tourism will pose a threat to environment. With the development of tourism,the more people to visit a place the more pressure on environment potection.It is acknowledged that some people will throw the tissues,cans or other rubbishes everywhere.What's more,they may write or draw at freely.In modern society,life is so changeable and people prefer to enjoying all kinds of activities and newly discoveries.Some businessmen may build lots of artificial lakes,forests to draw customers'attention.It will bring harm to the environment at extent.Worststill,some places are becoming commercial cities.The original feeling is lost,we can see all kinds of shops,restaurants everywhere,fo example, KFC. To put it in a nutshell,I absolutely believe that tourism will bring harm to the environment.And I hope everyone can shape environment potection sense.