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Ladies and Gentlemen,welcome to our city--Nanjing,please allow me to introduce this beautiful city briefly.Nanjing stands southeast of china,as the captial of Jiangshu province,the city has five million people.Nanjing is an ancient city,where ten dynasties has founded capital within the 2400 years of the city's history.There are many historical scenery in the city,such like Xuanwu Lake,Jiming Temple,and stone city,etc,and if you prefer to modern style,many up to date indurstrial factory and high buildings situade in there you can visit.