有效地采用了多种衔接方法,层次清晰;复杂句采用很棒;文中词汇表达不够丰富;请注意分段;可以适当增加副词的使用。
This is Li Fang,a young chinese lady and also a successful chemical engnieer.She's born in china on January,1967,has graduated at Beijing Fourth school on July,1985,and was admitted by Beijing University in the same year.She started her career in a chemical company in Shanghai in 1994,when she has received the Doctoral degree of chemical,a Janpanese company offered her a lucrative contract,but she didn't accept because she reluctant to give up her work in china.In 1998,she was awarded a prize for special contribution of chemistry.