文中学术词汇使用较丰富,但是拼写错误比较多;简单句比重稍微偏高,注意极个别句子错误;全文结构较为严谨,应适当增加文中衔接词的使用。
A increasing number of people are keen on western festivals that catch even more attendtion than festivals in china.People ,especially the youth,are invest more and more time and energy to them. In my opinion,there are tow main reasons accounting for such phenomenon.To begin with,people regard celebrating the western festivals as a fashion.If they don not enjoy these festivals as others,they think they are leaving behind by the developing world,which is considered as a shame.Then,the fast developing society and the quick tempo of the live burden the poeple,so they need more entertainments to relax them.So the western festivals give them excuse and chance to release their pressures. Such phenomenone have both negative and possitive effects.It promtes the development of comsuption .However,it also cause the ignorance of traditional culture.
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