2004年1月英语六级作文真题:浪费现象

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the loss of school yard With the development of science and society ,the phenomena on the some school's loss have been being severe increasely.so we have to pay much attention on how to deal with this problem . First of all,I will make further instructions,about the loss of the school including the loss of food ,the loss of water and the loss of the electricity.assumpting that we see the college students as an example,for instance ,in canteer ,one student waste some rice、 vegetables、water 、electricity,add up it ,all students will waste how much food、water and enrgy. what's more ,we should stressed that disadvantages of the loss .for the waste ,whathever it's much or little, we can't ignore the disadvantages that it brings to. when it comes to the hazard , in my opinion , such as ,it will cause that many people haven't have food,even lead to much more distance on the rich ,even pollute the evironment,and the quality of the air drop dymatic . all in all,the much waste we causing,the hazard it bings.so ,more and more people appeals that we should do some things in order to avoid wasting on my own .let's go ahead.