文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,但单词拼写做的很棒;句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;文章层次不够分明,缺少组织,需注意文章整体的组织结构。
Nowadays,many people achieve great success.However,what lead them to success?As far as I am concerned,a strong will is the most important. The reasons are as follows.Firstly,success is based on a strong will,so it is very important.Secondly,only strong will's people can finish great tasks.What's more,the students are also that they must be a strong will’s person.If they don't study hard,they will be poor people. Strong will is very important.In all,if you to intent to success people,you must have a strong will.