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Today in China,many families have only one child. So the children usually doted upon by all family members. Gradually some of them get used to depending on their parents and family members,Consequently, lack the ability to face their lives by themselves. There are some ways to help children to be independent. First,the child should have a chance to see the world around him individually to understand that there are various people and competitions in their lives, find his right position in the society only by individual efforts.In the second placeTo be independent is vital for the children,because no parents can go with their children for the whole life. Only an independent person can live and enjoy a full and meaningful life.