加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;请作者增加词汇表达的丰富度,且要加强拼写检查;请注意分段。
i have a good friend .shixin is his name. we first meet on the of zhuhai where we work .He is a handsome and kindly boy . Reading is his favoriate habit. In my opinion ,he is very smart .Sometimes he help me finish my work and teach me how to communicate with others.Besides, he is a good cooker.He ofen cook for us,and we like his cook. I am so proud of the wonderful friend .