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小学一年级英语作文:My New Teacher

发布时间:2013-05-15 11:32浏览次数:7152
要求:
描述我的新老师。
用户的作文(系统评分27.0分
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单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;能够使用一些简单的从句;过渡词和衔接词使用不恰当,缺少组织,可适当增加连接词的使用;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。

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