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As the proverb says,"Quitting smoking is easiest thing in the world.I 've done it hundreds of time."It is obvious that nothing succeeds without a strong will. As stated in the previous paragraph,a strong will is vital to us.What is the reason for this opinion?Mainly there are two reasons to prove my idea.First of all,a stong , which make much sense to us,not only develop our confidence but also face the difficulties bravely. More importantly,hardly can we focus on the amusement and we will always work take great pains in order to achieve our goal. Therefore,in my opinion,we had better assign much significance to foster a strong will. Finally,there is a will,there is a way.