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As the proverb goes,"Quitting smoking is easiest thing in the world.I 've done it hundreds of time."It is obvious that nothing succeeds without a strong will. As stated in the previous paragraph,a strong will play an essential role when we want to come to the top and is vital to us.What reason can support this view?Mainly there are two reasons to reflect what it means to us.First of all,a strong will, which makes much sense to us,not only develops our confidence but also can help us to face the difficulties bravely. More importantly,hardly can we focus on the amusement and we will always take great pains in order to achieve our goal. Therefore,in my opinion,we had better assign much significance to foster a strong will. Finally,where is a will,there is a way.