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internet,even a teenage,might be a hacker.There is no doubt that Internet play a important role in our life.with enormous and various informations for searching,Internet makes us study and work more efficiently and easily.What you need to do is simple--just input "baidu" or "google“,and tap the enter key. However,someone worry about that people,especially teenages whom are prone to indugle in internet chat or online game,will eventually ruin their study.The likes of Professor Yang ,who propose to sending the Internet addicts to take a electroshock, is a controversial famous person in china.His view about internet is totally negative,but still supported by some nervous parents. In my opinion,Internet is a tool we can use,not a controller what control us,so it is nonsense to afraid it too much, we should make the most of it,not turn our back on it.