学术词汇需要继续积累,单词拼写不错;句式变化较为明显,可适当增加从句的使用;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
internet,even a teenager,might be a hacker.There is no doubt that Internet play an important role in our life.With enormous and various informations for searching,internet makes us study and work more efficiently and easily.What you need to do is simple--just input "baidu" or "google“,and tap enter key. However,someone worry about that people,especially teenagers whom are prone to indugle in internet chat or online game,will eventually ruin their lives.The likes of Professor Yang,who propose to sending the Internet addicts to take an electroshock, is a controversial famous person in china.His view of internet is totally negative,but still supported by some nervous parents. In my opinion,internet is a tool we can use,not a controller what control us,so it is nonsense to worry about it too much, we should make the most of it,not turn our back on it.