语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;作者句法知识扎实,可适当增加从句的使用;单词拼写很棒,可考虑增加学术词汇的使用量。
In the past twenty years,every New Year's eve,after the traditional family reunion dinner,my father would turn on TV and watch the spring festival party,which was hold by CCTV,and be received by almost all families of china.There are many vivid memories conjured up with this topic, I still remember me and my litter brother played in front of my parents,who were watching the evening party. But today,things is changing and like many other families,my family not gather together for a TV Shows,when we try to do it,we feel boring.My brother bought a TV game console,so we playing games instead of watching tv in the New Year's eve. Some people think the spring festival party should be canceled,I totally agree with that.We used to living in a identical way of life,watching the same movie,listening the same song,be infiltrated by the same mind,be controlled by the same power.Now we have a limited freedom to choice,we choose the change,and never want to go back.