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Online Shopping As the economy developing,online shopping is getting more and more popular,Even office and goverment workers, students ,free workers,ect all like to buy things online.Me is one of them. I like to buy life things online,because I think it is conveniet and cheaper.I am a free worker at present ,I do not have enough time to go out for shopping.Sometime I spent some time going shopping,but I bought nothing that I like,so I think it is waste my time,and I like online shopping more.As the time past online shopping is gettng more and more conveniet and popular. Online Shopping has more good advantages ,but it also has some bad problems.For exam sometime we will be cheat by some bad seller,and got some bad goods.Sometime when we buy clothes and shoes we can not try them on,and we can not have a happy buying, and so on. Although online shopping has some problems,I believe it will get better in futuer.